06 November 2006

More short story first lines

I must admit I was curious how the Electric Spec stories stacked up in the first line department. Here's the data from our current issue:

  • Six years Federal Police Force, last two on Homicide.
  • In her cold bedroom chamber, Atana re-read her letter, then pressed the send button on her console.
  • "So what's the crisis?" Duram Karr sighed as he slid into a lounge chair in the VIP Room of the Commander's Club.
  • "Who gives a shit what the surface track is?" asked Kalypso.
  • My hand brushed the shoulder of his jerkin before he twisted away.
  • "Sol, it's time. They're ready to see you now."
  • WELCOME TO CYBERMATE, THE ONLY WESTERN HEMISPHERE GOVERNMENT-SANCTIONED MATE CERTIFICATION SYSTEM.

I am intrigued. How about you?

1 comment:

David Hughes said...

. . . and not a single adverb. (In fact, #1 skips the verbs all together.)